My story-Both worlds

[Foxshadow]

Chapter 1 the horriable begining-
Sorrow walked slowly and limply to Shadow Cove. Her knee was ripped up and bloody from the fall on her way out. Her black shirt and skirt were ripped up and soaked to death - also to add very muddy. Tears were streaming down her face as she tumbled to the border. It had only been an hour ago since Sanka had kicked her out of the pack for falling in love with another wolf in a different pack. It was also his enemy. Sorrow's weak and hoarse voice called out. "Kirouko..."
All Sorrow's mind could think was ' I hate you Sanka...I hate you. You did this to me ' but she knew she didn't hate him. She brought this on her own self.
Kirouko woke up hearing the cry of Sorrow. He padded out in wolf form and saw Sorrow all matted and bloody..but worse crying. Kiroko sat speachless and worried. What happened to Sorrow? "Are you ok.......?"Kirouko asked.
Kirouko was dead inside and he knew that Sorrow was hurt.
WHAT HAPPENED!!
'I dono' his spirit replyed
You idiot you let this HAPPEN WHY DID YOU LRT ME BE WITH HER!?
'You did that on your own' Kiroukos spirit remarked
Kirouko looked at Sorrow. No words came.
"I...told" she panted "Sanka that I loved you. He sent me away from his pack...told me to be with you. Iv'e lost everything" she wailed. "Iv'e lost my home, my beta postion, my friends, and Sanka's trust." tears flowed down her face. It was still storming outside. A crash of Thunder hit in the air, causing Sorrow to wrapped her arms around Kirouko. "Iv'e lost everything..." she whisperd.
Kirouko looked into the darkness. She was now living his life. Alone, no ones trust, no home to go to, no one to....love. Kiroko backed away. "Sanka is a sorry alapha..he lost the one person who matters the most,"Kirouko huged sorrow. Did he realy think Sanka would get away with this? He will pay, Kirouko thought.
Sorrow shook her head. "Kirouko...I actually wanted to tell you that me and you..it can't be. I belong in Red lake pack, not Shadow cove. I deserve to have what was mine to begin with. If I don't deserve that, then I only deserve death. I'm sorry, Kirouko. But I have to go make things right...for the best." she whisperd.
Kirouko thought of something......he had to leave her. Not only beacause of having whats hers back but because Kirouko was running away soon. "Go...its ok...I had a plan to run away it doesnt matter,"He said sadly. Thoug it was true he would leave and never come back. If it ment killing himself he would go away forever. No matter what.
Sorrow pulled him closer to her. "Don't run away." she whisperd. "Running away never solves anything. You have have a pack that needs you." she whisperd. "Please stay here with your pack...please."
"You do what you have to do...I'll do what I have to do..even if i have to die trying...go..Your pack needs you."Kirouko said.

Happy you sun of a ....Kirokou didnt finish because his spirit intruoted.
'Dont call me that!' His spirit said madly
Well my bad your quest is going to fail!Kirouko said willingly.
'At least your alive IM A STUPID SPIRIT!' Kiroukos spirit said.
Yea you know if I step foot near my sister she will kill me!Kiroko spat at his spirit
'Well my bad!' Kiroukos spirit replyed.
There was silence. No words only Kiroukos mind.

[Spottedheart]

Nice story Foxy. It's cool!

[Foxshadow]

Thanks I might make this a poll too wat do u think?

[Spottedheart]

Sure. If thats what you want to do. But you know my vote It's awesome!

[Foxshadow]

*laughing out loud!* thanks

[Flamefur]

Great story!
I really like the parts where Kirouko argues with his spirit xD They're funny, and there's a nice plot. It starts off with two characters introduced, three mentioned, and a huge conflict that will eventually become familiar as you move on with the story.
Just one suggestion, maybe you should introduce what creatures they are. When I saw "pack" I guessed wolves, but I'm not sure.
Anyways, I love it and would be delighted if you posted more :-)

[Foxshadow]

Thx I made chapter two.-

-Chapter 2 Wishing it was gone-
Tears welled in Sorrow's eyes. "I'm going to miss you..." she whisperd.
"Me too,"Kirouko said. He closed his eyes wishing all this away. But, it didnt happen.
"I want to spend one last time together...something we can do for our last time seeing eachother. It dosn't matter what. I just want to spend some time with you" she said.
Kirouko sighed. "What do you want to do?" Kiroukolayed on his back and waching the stars and the shapes.
"Anything." she said, laying next to him. Her face gazed at him. "I do love you..I don't want to do this. But I can't live in two worlds." she whisperd.
"I know what its like to lose everything.."Kirouko confessed. "I love you too but.......we were never ment to be....."Kirouko said. It was true the packs are what kept the forest at peace. But, everything was horriable.
"So lets make the best of what we have right now" she whisperd, grabbing his hand with her own.
"What......"Kirouko stammered.
"I want to make the best of the time we have now..." she said, wondering if he didn't think the same.
Kirouko noded "Ok,"He said. He looked up to the sky and then at Sorrow. Was this there last time togather?
Sorrow leaned her head against him as some tears were running down her face. "I won't get to see you again..will I?" she asked.
Kirouko had to tell her the truth. "Im going to my sisters...she said if i steped a foot near her she would kill me...but im going anywas im sorry,"Kirouko didnt hold his tears back. They slid down his face hitting the ground.
"No!" Sorrow screamed, pulling herself close to him. "Don't...no..no...no..." she cried "Don't kill yourself." she pleaded. "You have too much to live for." she said. "Don't do this" she whisperd in shaky sobs. "Stay alive...stay with your pack. You'll find someone else...I promise"
"I have to make peace eathier that...or die saveing my pack..."Kirouko said.

[[This is a love story kk]]

[Foxshadow]

Thanks Flamefur..they are part wolf...wolf and human